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Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones, computers. What are the reasons and give your solutions.

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Technology has changed the way of life of peoples by the invention of electronics gatgate like the computer and smartphones. It creates a problem for
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older people as they do not have knowledge about the uses of electronics device. Let's shed some lights on the various reasons behind
this
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 problem. There are
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 of reasons.
First
 and foremost an old person having no knowledge about electronics devices like these are not introduced at an early age.
Hence
, With the passage of time, The memory of people is
also
 reduced. So they found difficulty while learning these devices.
Secondly
, In the latter ,age people do not want to learn new technology as it would put extra efforts on them.
However
, there is a wish ,there is ar way.
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