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Some people think that to learn a second language well it is necessary to live in the country where that language is a spoken. What is your opinion about this?

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 well as it is essential to learn for living in that where that
language
 is spoken. Living in a foreign land where they speak another
language
 is hard, you need to learn their
language
 for easy communication. It is fine to learn a new
language
, especially if it is necessary,
for instance
, if you need it in your work.
To begin
 with,
language
 is essential in everyday living, it gives you proper and easy communication most importantly in the community.
For example
, if you migrate to another country, you need to learn how to speak their
language
 for you to be able to communicate well with the people surround you, it will help you to buy food easily in the supermarket and making friends with your neighbour. If you don't know their
language
, living in that place is hard.
Secondly
, if you move to another place that your dialect is not spoken you need to learn their
language
 for you to get a proper job. Working is part of our living, you cannot live without earning money, and for you to get that in another place, you need to find a job and it is easy to find work and it is an advantage if you know their
language
 being spoken. Like, if you want to apply for a cashier in one of the shops, they wanted someone who can understand and talk to their customer not having trouble communicating with them.
Therefore
, it is necessary to learn the
language
 in that country. In conclusion, wherever you are in
this
 world, learning another
language
 is essential, for us to find a good job and to communicate well with other people.
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