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What technologies did you use to help you in your studies? Describe how it has helped you. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#technologies #studies #support
Technologies have made learning convenient and fun in a way
that is
 extremely encouraging. During my studies, I use a range of high-tech components, especially E-
books
 and online platforms for students. The chance to communicate with a population of similar interests as mine and the availability of plentiful study materials have worked wonders for me.
While
 studying in seclusion, one can only do so much. More interactions can result in more information sharing, adding to our ever-growing knowledge.
This
 has been made possible
due to
 technology advancements.
For instance
, in the previous generation, it was quite an ordeal just to talk to teachers or friends if you had some doubts about the assignments but now the answer lies just in the palm of our hands, i.e., mobile phones or tablets. I take full advantage of
this
 facility which
this
 modern generation has granted.
Also
, E-
books
 have solved a problem with its portability.
Although
 physical
books
 are still in use, I had my fair share of fun when using E-
books
 because they can fit multiple
books
 in it and there is no dilemma of how many
books
 to carry with you every day.
Furthermore
, there is no need to go to distant bookstores anymore since we can just download the
books
 of our choice. I can get access to related study materials no matter how vast it is.
To sum up
, digital advancements,
such
 as mobile phones, laptops, internet have made studying very feasible and accessible to all. From my personal experience, not having to worry about how many
books
 I can fit in my bag and constant access to my social circle have made my academic path a lot easier and calmer.
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task achievement
Make sure to cover all parts of the task distinctly. While your essay covers how technology helped you study, it could benefit from a clearer articulation of specific reasons and examples.
task achievement
Try to elaborate further on your main points with more specific examples. For instance, mention specific instances or subjects where E-books helped you. This will help illustrate your points more clearly.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is mostly clear and coherent, ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea and flows logically to the next. Some of your transitions could be smoother.
structure
Your essay has a clear and strong introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing your response effectively.
content
You provide several valid points that demonstrate how technology has helped in your studies, which is critical for task achievement.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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