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EDUCATION IS NOT LUXURY, BUT A BASIC HUMAN RIGHT AND AS SUCH SHOULD BE FREE FOR EVERYONE IRRESPECTIVE OF PERSONAL WEALTH. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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In recent times, the awareness of
education
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 has become of
a
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great importance for both the elites and the noble.
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, every
person
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 in the world should have the right and freedom to schooling; be it, the rich or poor. It is agreed that
education
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 should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Analysing that free
education
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 will provide the opportunity to meet individuals who share the same view as theirs; as well as motivate learners to concentrate more on their studies.
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, opportunities should be given to people with free
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 for them to connect with other people who have the same interests as theirs.
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, it is an established fact that the school environment provides networking opportunities
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 enables
students
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meet
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 with professionals, leaders and make contacts with them. Sadly, if scholars are not given
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free
education
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, the chances of meeting people that could broaden their horizon may be missed.
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,
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 makes it clear that every
person
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 should be qualified for a free
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;
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, of their social rank.
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, if free schooling should be given to scholars, it will influence them to focus more on their learning in school.
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, it is known that
students
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 need not
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worry
where
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 their tuition fee will come from
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 if it is already catered for. Unfortunately, if
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 does not happen,
students
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 are not likely to remain focus on their studies.
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, it becomes apparent that every individual should have a free
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 in spite of their social rank. In summary,
students
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 with free
education
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 should be given
privilege
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 to meet higher individuals who share the same view as their own;
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, should
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 be driven to concentrate more on their studies.
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, it is cleared that every
person
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 should be provided free
education
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 no matter their social stand in the public. After
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 subject, it is predicted that irrespective of the level a
person
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 belongs to,
education
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 should be given freely as their fundamental right.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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