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A museum near your home is looking for people to do a part-time voluntary unpaid job. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum Director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. in your letter - explain why you want to do voluntary unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
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 letter in order to express my interest in a voluntary unpaid job. I got many opportunities in past which serve these roles. My experience can count as
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 asset for your museum.
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 job requires significant calibre and passion, which is quite rare among individuals. I can assure you that, working with ambition is one of the best traits in my personality.
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, being an influencer and having an educational YouTube channel would definitely raise awareness among the young generation by uploading videos related to museums showing their importance and positive side. Right now, I am working as a part-time associate in a company called Ingram as a repair technician. Being a morning person, I would definitely prefer in the morning.
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 , looking for something to add to my weekend schedule for a long time.
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 job fits well in my weekend as well. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Faithfully,
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly indicate how your skills are directly related to the museum's needs. Although you've mentioned being an influencer, specifying how this benefits the museum's objectives more clearly would strengthen your application.
coherence and cohesion
The letter could benefit from a slightly more structured approach within paragraphs to improve clarity. Ensure that each paragraph has a distinct purpose and transitions smoothly between ideas.
task achievement
You clearly stated your interest in volunteering and why it is personally meaningful, demonstrating motivation.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly and professional tone consistent throughout, which is appropriate for this task.
greeting and closing
Your closure is strong, expressing eagerness for a response, which is effective in letter writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Voluntary unpaid work
  • Museum Director
  • Intention
  • Contribute
  • Community
  • Art
  • History
  • Skills
  • Qualities
  • Communication
  • Organization
  • Attention to detail
  • Passion
  • Learning
  • Teamwork
  • Availability
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