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Teenagers have problems at home and school. What difficulties are they facing now? What should parents and schools do to help them?

#teenagers #home #school #difficulties #parents #schools
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Teenage
children
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 often face issues at their schools and homes. They face bullies at
school
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 and at
home
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 their
parents
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 do not understand them. Control on bad behaviour in schools and better communication at homes can help to alleviate the situation. Young
children
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 tease each other due to their looks and changing physical appearances in educational institutions. In teenage, girls body structures start changing and boys facial hairs grow. Some may see these changes earlier than others. Other students in the
school
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 make fun of them. In homes, their
parents
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 do not understand their feelings. They try to impose their rules and disciplines on them.
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 is the age of change, physical as well as mental. If
parents
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 do not help them, they may become rebellious.
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, juvenile crimes are increasing worldwide due to the lack of proper guidance from
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 possible solutions for these problems are controlling the behaviour in the
school
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 and better interaction with
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. Those who make fun of other fellow students should be punished. Strict actions against them should be taken. Proper
regualtions
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regulations
regulation
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 to be maintained so that the cases of bulley reduces.
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home
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parents
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 should talk to growing
children
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 on daily basis. They should try to understand their problems and guide them
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 to deal with the huge changes in their lives.
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, a recent study state that teenagers who are in regular contact with their
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 are handling the changes and
challanges
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challenges
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 age accurately. In conclusion, teenage is a delicate age where
children
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 face bad behaviour in
school
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 and lack of cooperation from their
parents
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. I believe
help
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my
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parents
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 and strict actions who behave badly in
school
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 is the best solution.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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