Study needs time, peace and comfort, whereas employment needs the same thing. Someone says it is impossible to combine those two because one distracts one another. Do you think this is realistic in our life today?

Space of comfort,
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the ambiance
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ambiance
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ambience
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of peace and having enough
time
to study is important,
however
, working at the same
time
need the same thing. Others,
fine
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find
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it impossible, because you cannot do
both
at the same. Nowadays, people are working while having their
studies
. I believe, that it is possible in
today
's generation. Every young adult's wanted to have extra income to sustain their
studies
and for personal experience.
Firstly
, being a student needs
time
to study for their exams but
also
they need to have a
job
for their own needs.
For instance
, students who don't have enough money to sustain their life while studying, they need to work. Having
both
is not easy but it needed for their own benefits. Many successful individuals
today
combine
the
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apply
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academic
studies
and work
like
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doctors and engineers.
Therefore
, it is possible to do
both
in our
life
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today
.
Secondly
, most
of
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apply
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companies
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the companies
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offer a small amount of
time
to
those student
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that student
those students
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who wants
have
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to have
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part-
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the part-time
a part-time
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time
job
.
For example
, in Europe, students
are being encourage
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are being encouraged
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to have work while studying, since they live
in
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on
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their own and to gain personal experience. They tend to get a
job
for them to buy what they want and do not depend on their parents. Most of these are being true in
western
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a western
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and eastern country, being independent to look for their
job
and studying at the same
time
to gain experience in life.
Hence
, it is real in
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today's
todays
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today's
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generation. In conclusion, though we need
time
, peace, comfort in our career and in
studies
, it is proven by many successful
person
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people
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that you can combine
both
at the same
time
especially
today
.
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