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To solve the ever increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is the increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?

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Increasing the cost of petrol is considered to be the most prominent method to mitigate the environmental-related problem all over the globe. While
this
 method is proved beneficial to some extend, I would argue that some other options have the most effective way to decrease elemental hazards. On the one hand, the
price
 of
fuel
 can
brings
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 some solution of environmental effects, but in short term.
To begin
 with, authorities have increased the
price
 of
fuel
 in order to reduce the number of
cars
.
Therefore
, the exhaust of vehicles will decline which directly cause the atmosphere.
However
, many masses have an ample amount of money so
higher
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price
 of
fuel
 cannot be changed their mind to buy
cars
 or bikes.
For example
, in the USA,
although
 the
price
 of petrol is double compared to 10
year
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 ago, the figure
of
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cars
 and motorbikes are rising every year.
On the other hand
, there are various alternative ways which will be implemented by
government
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the government
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 in order to reduce environmental-related problems. The
first
 one is that
government
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 must be imposed
strick
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strict
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 legislation
such
 as higher taxes on registration and complersury vehicle policy on buying
cars
. Owing to
this
 people may think before purchasing
vehicle
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a vehicle
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 because of the excessive
price
 which will not adjust in their budget. Another one is that authority should be allocated funds to improve the public transports As well as infrastructure.
This
 is because many people can commute by trains, buses and subways which will decline the number of
cars
 and their exhaust.
Thus
, environmental problems will
also
 be reduced. In conclusion,
Although
 the
price
 of
fuel
 is beneficial in the short term to solve the environmental problems, it seems to me that some effective ways government should be implemented to tackle
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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