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Limited money should be spend on computer equipment or good teachers. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #computer #equipment #teachers
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In
this
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 modern
era
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 everything in the
world
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depend
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to
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on
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 technology,if the
computer
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 technologies get outdated from the human
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 it will be a total loss of
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human efforts.In my
opinion
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 there should be a good
computer
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 device as well as an excellent
teacher
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 is equally important for the milestones of
human
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a human
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 being.
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 essay will discuss the advantages of the fully
equiped
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equipped
computer
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 system or
a
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 efficient
teacher
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 on the one hand,the
world
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 is getting faster with technologies.there are many inventions
has
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that has
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 been launched in the
world
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 something can replace the human being.the
neew
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new
 studies
shows
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 that by the year of 2050 most of the work doing by
human
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a human
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 being will be replaced by computers.
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instance
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 in
United
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the United
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states
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 of
America
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 most
of
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the
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lawyers are not holding the job because there is
particular
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a particular
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 application is available in
the
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smart phones
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smartphones
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 that can easily accessible for normal
people
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.It will help the
people
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 to get
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justice directly from the court.Not only
this
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 but
also
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 after few years the doctors will
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loose
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 their job because there is an application is currently available named WATSON,
this
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 application can diagnose the disease of the patient and it can
be prescribe
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 the medications according to the condition of the patient.Due to all of these
defintely
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definitely
people
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 should update their
knowledge
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 both technically and wisely
otherwise
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people
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 get outdated who did not run according to
new
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 era.
on the other hand
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,there should be a good
teacher
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also
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 will help a lot to improve the
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 of
people
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,in older days excellent teachers were there to teach the
students
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 especially in maths and science
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 to improve the personality traits.In past days the technology was not established as
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,during that
periode
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period
 only the teachers
was
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 the source of
knowledge
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.They have done
many
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 hard
work
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works
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 to gain the
knowledge
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 and they conveyed
to
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it to
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 the
students
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.Those
students
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 become the best
people
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 in
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society.The computers can never teach the best attitudes and
charachter
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character
 to the
students
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however
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 the mentors could do that.A
teacher
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 has an important role in
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the developmental
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 stages of each child.According to Sanskrit
myth
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 it has been written as MATHA PITHA GURU DAIVAM which means respect your mother,father,
teacher
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 and the almighty. To conclude,
although
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 teaching is
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divine employment,
computer
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 and technology is inevitable for the modern
world
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.Because a person cannot be successful without
computer
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knowledge
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 in his both curriculum and future carrier.The whole
world
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 is getting updated day by day.We all have to run behind
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modernisation or else we would get outdated from the earth.So be careful to
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 yourself
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