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Playing team sports is good for children to prepare for working life or not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are conflicting views regarding whether
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 can facilitate a child’s
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 career development. Both sides of the argument will be discussed in
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 essay, followed by my own perspective on
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 matter. People who consider
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sports
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 to be beneficial to a child’s career in the
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 may put forth the following argument.
Team
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sports
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 offer
children
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 more opportunities to meet peers from different age groups and cultural and economic backgrounds. Through communicating with people from a variety of backgrounds,
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 will learn to see
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 through different eyes and consider a problem by standing in others’ shoes , which are very important social skills. In the
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,
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 empathy could be translated into the skill of being able to cooperate and collaborate with their peers at work,
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 helping them work more efficiently and network with others, which may bring them better job opportunities.
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, opponents to
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 way of thinking have their own opinion, which they can
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 easily justify. Most
children
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 play
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sports
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 at school and their teams often represent their schools in competitions. When
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 is the case, in order to achieve a satisfying result, coaches will apply a lot of pressure on
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, which may make
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 believe that winning is extremely important and become too attached to achieving goals at all costs. Later in their adult
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, they may think achieving a goal or not is the only measurement of career success, so if they do not achieve a certain goal, they may feel unworthy or even stressed, and
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 could have a negative impact on their performance at work. In my opinion, from the above analysis, it seems that the impact of
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sports
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 depends on how coaches and
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 approach it. If both of them focus on the skills developed in participating in the
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 rather than the result,
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sports
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 could be beneficial to a child’s
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 working
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, whereas if too much emphasis is placed on the result,
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 may become very goal-oriented,affecting their adult working
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 negatively.
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