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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and dis advantages?

#year #school #university #dis
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it is often argued that more and more
people
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 tend to get a
year
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 off before entering a
university
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. The answer to
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question
 can vary depending on each individual's perspective.
This
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 essay will highlight both benefits and drawbacks, and suggest my opinion. One of the most
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significant
 benefits of having a
year
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 off is that
people
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 can
widne
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widen
 their outlook.
This
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 is primarily because
people
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 are able to have sufficient
time
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 to consider
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their future and
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people
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 can travel
other
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 countries they want to travel
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, one of my friends who took a
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year
 off his
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 has enough
time
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 for
traveling
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, so he can learn many things
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 as diverse cultures and lifestyles. it can lead
people
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 to understand new things and it can organize
his
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 thoughts during
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that it is not
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 period for
students
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 to have a
year
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 off before going to
university
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.
This
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 is mainly
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because
 most
students
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 spend a considerable amount of
time
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 so as to be superior to others with their repetitive competitions, so the
students
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 put tremendous effort to get a high level of job in the future.
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, it could be a dangerous choice
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 young
people
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 because
students
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 are more likely to waste their
time
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 in their valuable
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.
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, in Korea, a large
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number
 of
students
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 who take a
year
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 off spend their
time
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 meaningless, playing games or drinking without obvious subjective.
As a result
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,
students
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 can miss their precious
time
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 as well as
students
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 might have trouble with being back
their
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university
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. To summarize what I have mentioned above, while it is
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 that there are minor problems related to
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year
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 off, it
also
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 can be a huge positive impact on
students
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. If it is taken into account sufficiently, the
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benefits
 of having a gap
year
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 far
overwiegh
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overweigh
overweight
 some shortcomings.
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