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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development.

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In the contemporary era,
technology
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 has become advanced.
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, it has changed the method of communication,
people
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use
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 to interact with society.
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 some relationships are temporary, they are easily accessible. Every development has a positive and negative side, so has
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This
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 essay will discuss both points with some relevant examples. on the one hand,
technology
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 affected the nature of relationships in a positive way.
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, with the help of many online platforms,
people
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 can connect smoothly with their near and dear ones.
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, in past, families used to send telegrams for giving any information to their members and that took a large amount of
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 to receive a response. But now with the aid of Facebook, WhatsApp or other social media, they are able to connect to their
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 wishers over the globe, at any point
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.
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, despite many merits of the advancement in
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, the predominant drawback of it is that nowadays
people
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 are less social as compared to an earlier
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.
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, most of the crowd, interact with their close ones by the means of social platforms only
instead
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 of having a face to face meetings. To illustrate, a survey shows that 80% of youngsters
use
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 almost 60% of their spare
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 on online interaction with their friends and relatives. In conclusion, the relationship between two
people
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 can be easily built and reachable by the
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 of
technology
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 and they are some negative aspect of it, which can be controlled by limited
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 of it.

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  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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