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Many museum and historical sites are mainly visited by the tourists but not local people's why is this case ?

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It goes without saying that, museum historical
place
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 is considered as the knowledge counters of the city . Sach as it can be seen that the local
people
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 do not prefer to go these sides early tourists
visit
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 them.
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 essay will discuss why local do not
visit
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 museum and historical building and
also
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 suggest some ways to attract them To being with ,there are several reasons for the local
place
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 to do not
visit
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 a local
place
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 of history and museums . And foremost peoples are busy with their domestic chores and they are happy with their sedentary lifestyle ,but the main factor is the different motivation of tourists and local
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 for a tourist ,the aim when visiting another country ,city or region is to learn about that new
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 and understand it's culture and history .
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 , local
people
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 may be too busy working and have either learned
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 at school or understand it through personal experience .
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 tourists aside time and money for activities The solution is simple .All we need is awareness and strong will power .There is a myriad way to attract native to museums and historical site .
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 , the school can give their student's assignments related to the history culture and tradition learn will encourage the most parent to take their children to collect useful information.For , the instant the exhibition can attract locals To conclude local
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 don't
visit
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 local museums and historical due to the fact that they are busy with their life. We can use various ways to get them interested.
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