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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extend do you agree ?

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Crime
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 is a pervasive problem in most countries around the world. Despite the penalties like incarceration and life imprisonment, prisoners try to re-offend. Post comprehending the trend, many people believe that some offenders, must be asked to do an unpaid
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 of putting them into jail, to teach them a lesson.
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, I opine against
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, a lion's share of the crowd contends that, by making the prisoners do a community
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 with no remuneration , their punishment sentence can help us to curb the
crime
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. As nobody likes to do a
job
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 free cost and still if, someone has to do it, like cleaning roads or office toilets etc. they are going to regret it, every moment while performing their assigned
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 ,still they will be living a sort of normal life as they will be around the civilians all the time.
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 to it, every criminal case is not the same, the intensity of heinous act varies, so we cannot think of making murders or thieves to get away from what they did to the victim, by just servicing the state for few months.
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, assigning a
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 for reducing
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 and giving justice to the victim and affected families is not an appropriate approach.
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, in order to keep faith in the judicial system, all cases ought to be analyzed separately the way it is usually done. All the murders and the rapiest should be taken behind the bars, so that correct justice can be accomplished.
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, if, a strict punishment like a death sentence, if given to one rapiest, it will serve as a threat and set an example for those who are thinking of committing it. To conclude, the way
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 is soaring drastically, I firmly believe that
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 it is significant to take stringent actions against the wrongdoing to curb the
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 of giving unpaid jobs to the criminals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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