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Some people believe that research of medicines should be directly based on human trial. Is this the right way give your opinion and discuss its advantages and disadvantages.

#people #research #medicines #right
Generally, medicine
trials
 are performed on animals or by
computer based
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 examination before applying on individuals, except those which are
non-serious
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the non-serious
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 impact on human beings. While
,
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 a certain group of people are in
favor
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 of all new
trials
 should straightly apply
on
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 the end-users suffering
with
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 the disease, whereas, it has some pros and cons.
However
, I am fully disagreeing with the
view point
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 of
direct
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a direct
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 test on human
life
.
Trials
 can give both results whether successful or unsuccessful, and it would be very critical to release medicine in
open
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 market without getting
authentic
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 output. If
,
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 experts would directly
tested
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 medicines on human
life
, they put the
life
on
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 risk by ignoring its
further
 symptoms. Apart from
this
, it would be more difficult to procure the side-effects, as at that time they would be unaware that, how dangerous it will?
For example
, during
covid-19
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a covid-19
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 pandemic, in some countries
trials
 are applied on infected persons and it was lead to result in death for some cases.
Therefore
, human
trials
 have
lot
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 of ill-effects
,
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 and
great
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 loss to
precious
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life
 of individuals.
On the other hand
, sometimes patient
are
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 in critical conditions with unidentified viruses, at that time to save that
life
 immediate
trials
 are applied
on
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to
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 them, which would result in both
side
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 positive or negative. As, nobody in
medical
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 field intentionally put the
life
on
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at
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 risks, unless
such
situation
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a situation
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arise
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 and
also
 pressure to save
life
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the life
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 of other public.
In addition
 to
this
, they are
also
 unaware
about
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that
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what kind of the disease, whether it is communicable or not.
For example
, in Wuhan,
that
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 is
epic
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 centre of covid-19, they are unable to control the worse
situation
 as it was transferring one to another.
Hence
, in
such
 kind of
situation
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 it is beneficial to directly trial to take chance to save that person and millions of others. In conclusion, even though there are many drawbacks of human
trials
 which lead to serious outcomes,
however
,
in
particular
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situation
 benefits can
also
 not to be ignored.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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