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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #people #advertisements #products #lives
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Advertising has become an integral part of a global corporate world and it has
may
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 advantages as well as drawbacks which makes people from all
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 to think about
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 implementation. In
current
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the current
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compitative
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competitive
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 each and every enterprise, company or organisation look
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 way to publish their new products in a
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consumer oriented
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 market and to gain
a
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success in launching the
product
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 or to provide the information to the
consumer
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 which they are looking from the
product
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. Advertising helps
producer
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the producer
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 to publish the details of the
product
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 to attract more clients for their new development as well it helps
consumer
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 or client who is a king of a market to understand how the new
product
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 is suitable to them. It is always seen that more advertisement helped
company
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the company
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 to boost their sale and increase
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growth from
financial
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a financial
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 and economical point of view. There are few drawbacks or
limitaions
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limitations
limitation
 of advertisement which includes high cost from organisation
prospective
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perspective
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 and some times wrong publicity of
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 which impacts
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consumer
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the consumer
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. The recent example is beauty cream which
product
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 owner
are
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 claiming, that the use of it will help in gaining a fair skin which
catch
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 the attention of
younger
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the younger
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 generation to look fair. There are few good examples of advertisement where common
pleople
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people
 can make good use of the
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such
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 as how many products of the same
catagory
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category
 are available in the market and which one of them is more
sucessful
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successful
.
Comming
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 to the point where I believe advertising is a useful
wepon
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weapon
 if
producer
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the producer
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 uses it properly and
consumer
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 understands it correctly. So as per my opinion advertising is very much important and essential to increase awareness of products in current
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 and
fulfill
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 the demand of
existing
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the existing
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 situation of
global
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the global
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word
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.
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