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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these days, already all the population visit to other regions to enjoying. Some
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 think that
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 trip affects
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 badly. I believe that travelling to any country for any
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 would provide great returns for
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. I will elaborate on my opinion in
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 paragraphs. In the world, there is a lot of county and nations and I believe that to be able to contact these nations is a considerable thing. Being a qualified human requires some properties and seeing new
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 and cultures is one of these requirements. A person who has experienced many journeys to other
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 would have more advantageous than others in terms of different things.
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,in 2018 I had travelled to Ireland for two months and I claim that
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 many aspects. I cannot see any obstacle for that unless there is a bad intention. On the other hands, in the 20th-century humanity faces many dangers like diseases, terrorism etc.Travelling to other
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 should have an unwanted influence on the
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 in these dangerous conditions.
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,in early,2020 the world has encountered a deadly virus called Covid that caused many ramifications for all the world. It is inevitable to have undesirable consequences in these circumstances. In conclusion, unless there are extraordinary bad conditions visiting other
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 would not have a negative impact on the
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.
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, I believe that it is very beneficial for each member of the
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 and
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 should do these voyages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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