Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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generation is showing an immense admiration for

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and

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celebrities these days

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they are not perfect role models for them. In my opinion, I believe that

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phenomenon has a negative impact on younger adults. One of the detrimental

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of emulating famous stars is that young people are more likely to learn bad behaviour from them.

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to worship these idols and follow their footsteps in everything

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the negative aspect of their actions. Some teenagers watch famous

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and

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stars doing reckless actions,

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as drug abuse, fightings and frauds, and

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they become more propensity to engage in negative activities as

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of showing off love to their role models. For that reason, young adults are not aware of the repercussions of imitating

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and

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renowned individuals. Another serious drawback of

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development is that some of these celebrities encourage young individuals to go against cultural beliefs. They form strong beliefs when they see that their

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have broken all the traditional norms so that they could enforce their perspectives regardless of what their societies thought about them. A typical example of

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trend is when some famous

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women announced removing their scarfs, which made thousands of

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girls doing the same thing and

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was against their

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religion

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would trigger youngers to

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against their communities rules

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and

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would cause social

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. To sum up, it is often

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that

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and

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celeberated

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celebrated

individuals are not always

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a suitable

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role model for young adults because

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trend would stimulate them to break their cultural traditions as well as show bad attitude.

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media personalities
sports icons
role models
admiration
influence
behavior
mindset
values
unethical behavior
healthy lifestyles
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celebrity culture
career aspirations
educational goals
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Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

How does the film Green Book illustrate the effects of racial segregation on personal relationships?

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In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion