Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Young
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generation is showing an immense admiration for
populare
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popular
media
and
sports
celebrities these days
although
they are not perfect role models for them. In my opinion, I believe that
this
phenomenon has a negative impact on younger adults. One of the detrimental
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of emulating famous stars is that young people are more likely to learn bad behaviour from them.
This
is because
younger
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generation
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to worship these idols and follow their footsteps in everything
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ignoring
the negative aspect of their actions. Some teenagers watch famous
media
and
sports
stars doing reckless actions,
such
as drug abuse, fightings and frauds, and
therefore
they become more propensity to engage in negative activities as
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a way
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of showing off love to their role models. For that reason, young adults are not aware of the repercussions of imitating
media
and
sports
renowned individuals. Another serious drawback of
this
development is that some of these celebrities encourage young individuals to go against cultural beliefs. They form strong beliefs when they see that their
idoles
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idols
have broken all the traditional norms so that they could enforce their perspectives regardless of what their societies thought about them. A typical example of
this
trend is when some famous
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women announced removing their scarfs, which made thousands of
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girls doing the same thing and
this
was against their
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religion
.
This
would trigger youngers to
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rebel
against their communities rules
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and
consequently
would cause social
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instability
. To sum up, it is often
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argued
urged
that
media
and
sports
celeberated
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celebrated
individuals are not always
suitable
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a suitable
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role model for young adults because
this
trend would stimulate them to break their cultural traditions as well as show bad attitude.
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