Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
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of
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networking site. Some even argue that it`s demolishing our society now. I agree with the view that social networking
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beneficial for our daily life when
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it
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correctly.
First
, social networking like WEIBO played a significant role during
COVID-19
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pandemic.
People
were able to express
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helps
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and needs when society was shutting down.
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, there were tons of information online about the tests and admitted to hospital requests so that volunteers could support to connect with
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regarding
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the vacancy to save lives.
Second
, it’s the only channel to connect with friends that stay around.
This
means if I. wish to know what happened to my friends’` life during
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and let them know
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experience I gained during
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. , the best way is to message them on social
media
.
Finally
, social
media
also
form a force when government neglect their duty.
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approach of
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spreads fast that pressures authority to undertake their responsibility.
However
,
people
also
suffering privacy violation in
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the virtual
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world.
For instance
, the COVID patients` personal information was leaked on social
media
therefore
numeric crows were bulling patient and his or her family aggressively. Confused words went viral online fool
people
who were unable to tell from right to wrong.
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is because
people
could easily type
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words and send
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without thinking about
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which might cause misunderstanding in an undesired way. In conclusion, social
media
is a product of an instant information age which like a tool could be manipulated either way. Thereby if
people
think the power of the same were abused,
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should enact a standard to screen the talks online. By doing so we could make sure
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stays healthy and sane.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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