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Fewer and fewer peoplewalk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

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In modern life, many
people
 have lost the habit of walking regularly. While there are various reasons for
this
 trend, some measures can be implemented to encourage
people
 to take up walking as part of their daily routine. There are two main reasons, in my opinion, why fewer
people
 walk regularly nowadays.
Firstly
, the development of technology has discouraged some
people
 from walking. Escalators and lifts have appeared everywhere in most towns and cities, especially in shopping centres and offices. They are, admittedly, convenient and time-saving but they
also
 encourage laziness.
Secondly
, as part of our modern lifestyle, so many journeys are made by car.
For example
, parents now often drop off and pick up their children at the
school
 gate, even if the
school
 is near their home.
This
 is understandable in one sense, as parents worry about the safety of their children, especially if there are busy main roads to cross to get to
school
. There are measures which could be implemented to encourage
people
 to walk more often. In low-rise buildings, the use of the stairs should be obligatory, with a lift only for disabled
people
. In order to dissuade
people
 from using their cars unnecessarily, no-stopping zones ought to be established in the vicinity of schools. If children become accustomed to the habit of the daily walk to
school
,
then
 responsible parents would need to accompany them. The whole family would
thus
 get used to regular walking exercise. As another measure, pavements should be improved and more pedestrian-only zones established in city centres. Covered walkways and more trees could provide relief from rain and sun in
such
 zones. In conclusion, some reasons why
people
 are walking less regularly can be identified, and some simple solutions should be adopted to encourage them to walk more frequently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • automation
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • safety concerns
  • pedestrian zones
  • public health campaigns
  • incentives
  • commuting
  • walkathons
  • physical and mental health
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