You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter •Tell them how long you are staying. •Describe the type of accommodation you would like. •Explain what facilities you will need nearby.

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Dear Officer, I am writing
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letter as a request for my stay in Montreal for a few months. Currently, I am living in Florida as a working woman. As part of my job, I got a new proposal to conduct a seminar and workshops in Montreal for 3 months.
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, I must move to Canada by next month though the first workshop starts on April 1st till June 31st. In spite of
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being my first time visiting
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place
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it would be favourable to rent some accommodation with your recommendations.
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, my preference for
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would be of 1 bedroom 1 bath apartment, including some amenities
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as wifi, refrigerator, heating facilities
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laundry machines inside.
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, it would be really convenient if the place is near Concordia University as I am supposed to conduct the seminar for the university students.
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, looking for a room which is easily accessible to the nearest metro station, shopping malls etc. Thank you for the recommendations. Looking forward to the stay. Kind Regards, A

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Consider mentioning your preferred move-in date as well as the duration of your stay more clearly at the beginning of the letter, to enhance clarity.
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Ensure to use more formal language in your letter, such as avoiding phrases like 'must move', which could be expressed in a softer manner.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate the main ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability and logical flow.
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The letter is polite and effectively conveys your request.
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The details about the type of accommodation are clear and specific, which helps the rental office understand your needs.
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