Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the
last
few years, the number of social problems
including youth has increased. Some people think that the reason for this
are
parents, who spend much more time with work than with their children. From my point of view, people are right. Thereby, I agree that Change the verb form
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this
problem is caused by parents’ irresponsibility.
Firstly
, it is a known fact that the
society is more concentrated on Correct article usage
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the
career building and money than creating a family or bringing up kids. Correct article usage
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For example
, the BBC’s recent research has shown that 30% of the population are not going to have toddlers at all. This
research proves that the
priorities have changed a lot presently. Remove the article
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However
, if they even have a baby, he does not take the amount of attention he need
.
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needs
Finally
, mothers and fathers do not spend their time together with kids
. They often hire a nurse or ask grandparents to look after their babies. Add a pronoun
their kids
As a result
, infant
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the infant
have
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has
problems
with their mental health. For instance
, they may become depressed or even have suicidal thought, because they do not feel love
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the love
the
parents. Change the word
their
That is
why social problems
involving the
teenagers become more and more popular these days.
To sum up, parents are responsible for their youngsters’ behaviour. Correct article usage
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Therefore
, bad education in family
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the family
a family
problems
. In my humble opinion, moms and dads should educate children, play games with them and do other entertaining things together. I guess,
it will be helpful for kids to feel loved and needed.Remove the comma
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