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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at he hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter: - explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital - say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do - give details of whrn you would be available for this work

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Respected Sir/Madam, I am Ram and I stay at nearby 35 Cliff Avenue. Recently, during my commute to the office, I saw an advertisement from your hospital looking for volunteers for unpaid work at the hospital. I would like to express my interest in
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 volunteering activity. I am interested in
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 service because of my huge passion for serving humanity and I believe that serving patients in the hospital can serve the greater good of humanity. I have done bachelor's in medical science and have a very good understanding of medical applications.
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, I can offer my help in providing medications to patients. If
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 not feasible, I can able to offer my help by taking patients in wheelchairs to the outside garden area to refresh them. Since I am working on the weekdays, I can't come to the hospital on those days.
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, I can commit all my weekends for the next 2 months to hospital volunteering work. Hope my skillset & timing matches your requirements. Looking forward to a reply from your hospital soon. Yours sincerely, Ram

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task achievement
Your letter is very well-structured and contains all the necessary details. However, you might want to add more specific examples or experiences that showcase your skills and commitment.
coherence cohesion
In your opening and closing, you addressed the recipient politely and professionally, which sets a positive tone. Well done!
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear, logical structure with distinct paragraphs for each point.
task achievement
Your tone is appropriate and conveys enthusiasm and willingness to contribute, which is excellent for this context.
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