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Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
 think that having parties to celebrate important moments
such
 as graduating or getting married is the same as throwing
money
 away while others believe that these
celebrations
 are extremely important.
This
 essay discusses both these views and
then
 I will give my own opinion which is that spending a lot of
money
 on
celebrations
 is a waste of
money
. On one hand, spending
money
 on
celebrations
 can be a waste of resources.
Firstly
, these special parties usually cost a fortune since individuals have to rent a place, hire a band and catering services but only
last
 for a few hours,
consequently
,
people
 will never see all that
money
 again so it should not
be consider
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 as an investment.
Additionally
, the budget spent on it could certainly be better used on something that has more value like buying a car, investing
on
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people
’s business or even travelling. To illustrate, many young
people
 in Brazil nowadays are not putting their
money
 on big
celebrations
 when they get married and save
the
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money
 to spend in their new homes.
On the other hand
, there are those who believe it is important to have something to mark important events.
People
 feel that these
celebrations
 can be the point where they are rewarded for all the effort they made so far and give them
determination
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 to keep moving forward and going after their dreams.
Moreover
, parties are
also
 a moment to share their achievements with friends and family creating memories of the most important events
on
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 their lives which they will never forget and can always look back through the photographs and videos from that unforgettable day. In conclusion, both sides have their merits,
however
, in my opinion, spending a huge amount of
money
 on a celebration is a total waste of
money
 since the entertainment only lasts for a few hours and
this
money
 could be spent on more essential things
such
 as acquiring a house.
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