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Governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move from large cities to the regional areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, it has become far more normal for the nation to encourage large organizations located in the rural
instead
 of
cities
. In my opinion,
this
 trend has more pros than cons.
This
 essay will provide serval reasons to support my position. On the one hand, it may have some drawbacks for those people who
work
 in factories or companies.
For example
, because the organizations where they
work
 are moved to rural regions but they still live in the
cities
, it means that they need to spend more
time
 going to
work
. Needless to say, those workers who have kids cannot pick up their kids on
time
, or even they have to wake up earlier for transportation.
On the other hand
, I believe that more and more states approve the policy of moving because of several positive effects.
Firstly
, for those people who claim that need more
time
 on the way to companies,
however
, if they
work
 in the
cities
, the traffic jam might be a big problem for them.
Instead
, if they can avoid the road leading to the centre, I think they can save enough
time
 to
exchange
Verb problem
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 farther distances.
Secondly
, for suburban residents, if some high-polluted factories move to other space, they might have cleaner air and not need to suffer the pollution from industries and the vehicles not be trapped in traffic jams, and the noise from cars and scooters will decrease. In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because the problem of rush hour might be solved and most people can save more
time
 to do other things and the surroundings of
cities
 are better than before.
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Task Achievement
Consider starting your essay by directly addressing the question posed. Including a clear thesis statement in your introduction helps guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
When discussing advantages and disadvantages, it's important to clearly separate these points in different paragraphs. This makes your argument easier to follow.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to organize your ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by examples or further explanation.
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Try to provide specific examples to support your points. These examples make your argument more convincing and show the reader how your ideas apply in real life situations.
Task Achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Varied and precise language helps to clearly convey your ideas and keeps the reader engaged.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on the clarity of your introduction and conclusion. Make sure your introduction clearly states your viewpoint on the topic, and your conclusion effectively summarizes your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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