Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some says that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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bunch of people believe that free
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at every level is beneficial for everyone while
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have a contrasting viewpoint. Those who oppose state that university
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should not be free owning to they become practical and independent so they could pay their
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. Here, there is
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argument on both sides
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, before coming down to my opinion
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will discuss both arguments in
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further
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essay. On one side, at the time of college studies, scholar
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mature and they can start earning by doing part-time jobs so
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will help them to earn some money and they will able to bear their expense. The advantages of part-time work during graduations are, they become independent, gain practical knowledge, learn about financial management and many more which are make them confident.
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has so many
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to take care
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medical, science and technology, research and development, law and etc. Authorities
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to spend million money for the welfare of society, if university degree expense
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spent by
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the student
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themselves it will be better for
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society.
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Canada
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most
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grad
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students
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do small jobs after classes to pay their tuitions
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. On the other side, graduation tuition
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are expensive that every student cannot afford. Even if they do different part-time works, they are not able to bear
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gradually
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to leave
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tertiary
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permanently.
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part-time employment during
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which
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create
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stress for
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because of the workload they cannot focus on their study and at some point, they will give more importance on earning money rather than focusing on
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. Everyone does not get
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equal opportunity for
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if
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is not provided free.
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recent survey conduct stated that most of the
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in India leave their higher
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because they and their families could not pay their tuitions
fees
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.
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, it is better to provide
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cost of
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is
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beneficial for everyone. In conclusion, I strongly
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free
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at all level because
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will give equal opportunity to study. Those who oppose
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idea consider that
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are mature during their graduations, they can manage by doing small survival jobs.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
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  • despite

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