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Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information on the Internet and study at home. Agree or Disagree?

#schools #children #information #internet #study #home
In modern society, it is argued that
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formal education and school attendance is unnecessary by the reason that the
internet
 has a variety of different subjects and
children
 are able to study it from home. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion because the
internet
 cannot provide interaction with a
teacher
 as well as the
internet
 is highly addictive and destructive. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will explain my viewpoint with relevant examples.
To begin
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 the
internet
 is a great
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 for finding information. It does not completely satisfy the purpose
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 education, which is providing a solid knowledge of
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subject
 for
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 generation.
However
, the goals can be achieved by communication with
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 and active inclusion of a pupil in the educational classes.
This
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internet
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storage of information, while a
teacher
 is literary a guide through the essence of knowledge. On top of that, a
teacher
 is helping the youth to understand a
subject
, encouraging them to study it in
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depths which is the
internet
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 education channels.
For example
, the pupils
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 how to calculate their maths and make it correctly. They can be understood the answer by asking their teachers.
In addition
, there are plenty of distractions on the
internet
such
 as entertainment sites with games, different forums
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 videos.
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 kind of resources are may cause
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internet
 addiction, when a person simply spends hours and hours in front of the screen without
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Thus
, the child was learning
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 online, he may be easy distracted by mess media as well as becomes an
internet
 addict.
For instance
, today due to the pandemic most
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school
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children
 throughout the world are studying online and their parents noticed that it was hard to
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 as their
children
 tend to
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 games online
instead
 of studying and cannot
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subject
. In conclusion, I completely disagree that the school lost their potential with the appearance of the
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 because
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supervision from a professional, who can help them to gain fundamental.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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