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A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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With the advancement of
technology
 ,
people
 are becoming dependent on these gadgets. Some of the
advantages
 of these include access to
information
 as well as convenience,
however
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 there are
also
disadvantages
such
 as misinformation, social disruption with
use
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the use
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 of cellphones and inability to
change
.
This
 essay will discuss the
advantages
 and
disadvantages
 as well as the positive and negative
impact
 of machinery
in
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 peoples
lives
.
Also
,
this
 essay will argue why
technology
 has a positive
impact
to
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on
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 our
lives
 and agree that living in the computer age has more
advantages
. It is apparent that more and more
people
 have been reliant
to
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technology
. We are now living in the age of artificial intelligence where computers and cellphones have been our companions, our friends and assistants. Everything comes so easy and very accessible.
People
 can simply access
information
 around the world with just a click of a button on the cellphone or on the computer.
Furthermore
,
technology
 has improved so many things
such
 as our mode of communication, transportation, agriculture, to forecast weathers conditions. Like
for example
,
information
 about Covid can be easily accessed and shared
to
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with
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 other parts of the globe. If there are weather forecast or earthquakes these can be easily communicated to other parts of the globe. Overall, advance
technology
 has
profound
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a profound
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impact
to
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on
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 humanity. One of the
downside
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downsides
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 of easy access to
information
in
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on
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 the internet is without restrictions or censorship from a government agency or licensing body.
People
 can just upload any
information
in
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 the internet which sometimes unverified causing misinformation to the public.
Also
,
this
 cause social disruption in the use of cellphones as
people
 tend to focus their attention on their phones leaving others in the group,
also
this
 interrupts them while in conversation w/ others. Another downside of fast advancing
technology
 is the inability of some
people
 to
change
. They don’t want to adapt to new
technology
 as these
people
 are very conservative and are not flexible to
change
. They still prefer the old ways
in
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of
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 making things done which they are accustom to. Some of these
people
 are the elderly
which
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who
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 are no longer interested to
change
. Overall, these
disadvantages
 are just minors which do not
effect
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 the bigger benefits that
these
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this
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 new
technology
 is giving to the
people
. In conclusion,
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advancement of
technology
 has made the
lives
 of many
people
 easier and more convenient. I agree that living in the computer age has more
advantages
 than
disadvantages
. In my opinion,
technology
 has a profound
impact
to
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people
’s
lives
.
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