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Some people think that we cannot learn from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. discuss both views and give your opinion

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There are few individuals who think that we cannot get valuable lessons from the past that could help our
life
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today
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, while some believe that
history
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 is an important source of facts to know human's
life
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. In
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 matter. Others argue that knowledge that
people
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 got from the past is not applicable in the present day. It is because the world keeps on evolving and becoming more modernized and solutions from way before may not be useful
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.
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, traditional medicine will not be applicable in the new era
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 due to the invention and the upgrades of technology that are way more reliable and have proved to detect illness faster and cure accurately.
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, there are still few who think that happenings from the old days will help
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 understand humanity.
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 is why the subject
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History
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 is still taught in school to guide the new generations of how everything began. Moreso, historical events
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 as discoveries were still used by modern scientists
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 as references to aid them in their works. I believe lessons from the past,
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 as past experiences can help one become
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wiser and disciplined in terms of dealing
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with problems
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, challenges
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and
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 crises.
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,
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 and our ancestors have been the basis in regards to the culture, morals and values that
people
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 follow, share and teach.
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 has helped
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 to live
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accordingly
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 and with principles. To end, each person has different views regarding the importance of
history
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. Some say, due to the rapid advancement of the world
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, knowledge from the past will not be of help anymore. While others argue it is valuable as it helps to properly comprehend the
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 of humankind. For me, the past has been a big help to everyone, as it has aided
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become
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 who they are
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 and the archives from the past
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 been the basis to help improve the world.
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