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The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education.To what extent do you agree?

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Recent events of human history prove that sometimes
art
 is the only weapon against never-ending sources of hatred that appear in the life of a common person dictated by the growing imbalance of capital and increase of poverty levels. Some
government
 bodies in Russia believe that relocating budgets from
art
 to education can positively
effect
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this
 established trend.
Such
 measures are counterproductive to the goal of creating a positive environment for human mentality and
thus
 are dictated by
government
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the government
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 inability
of
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to
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 formulating the right approaches
of
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to
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 social engineering. Education is thought to create a balanced society where every person has equal opportunities to achieve success by having
right
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the right
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 intellectual instruments and capabilities to perform
required
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the required
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 set of tasks.
However
, people what to express themselves in a different way that only
art
 can deliver. Without
government
 support in most
cases
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 artists won’t be able to sustain their living or express themselves enriching other people’s lives. Education creates possibilities for a person to evolve
its
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 intellectual assets while
art
 provides ways to communicate his feelings and contribute to society his beliefs through different, sometimes more compelling ways to gain traction and change other people’s lives. If the main goal of a
government
 we choose is to create a balanced society where each citizen can influence the lives of others –
art
 must be a vital point of its existence.
Thus
, decreasing the ways of supporting it is counterproductive to its main role as a social engineering body.
In other words
 “
Art
 live matters”.
Submitted by ekaterina.kosheleva.2016 on

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