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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Computers
 are ubiquitous in educational institutions today. Like many issues in contemporary education, not everyone views
this
 change favourably. Yet
computers
 have had an overall progressive influence on educational practices.
In particular
, though their ease makes them susceptible to being used for malicious purposes,
computers
 have made
information
 more readily available to
students
 in a positive way. Some educational researchers claim that
computers
 have had an adverse impact on education, particularly in regards to the ease in which
students
 can now plagiarize. Plagiarism, or stealing someone else's ideas or words by claiming them as your own, is a widespread problem in North American college campuses.
Students
 sometimes copy-and-paste
information
 from online sources and submit it as their own. While it is true that
computers
 are often used to plagiarize, the problem can be solved when teachers effectively promote academic integrity.
For example
, in one of my classes, the instructor required us to write the
first
 draft in-class without the use of a
computer
.
This
 made it more difficult for some
students
 to get away with plagiarism. In fact,
computers
 have had an overall positive influence on education by facilitating access to
information
. Prior to
computer
 technology, most
information
 was found in
books
, which you had to purchase or borrow. Today,
however
, the
information
 in these
books
 are available online through PDFs or webpages.
For example
, archive.org contains thousands of
books
 no longer in circulation. These
books
 may be accessed for free by anyone with a
computer
 and an internet connection. All in all,
although
 the widespread use of
computer
 technology has some drawbacks, especially related to plagiarism, the stronger view is that
computers
 have improved educational practices, particularly, by rendering
information
 more easily accessible by the masses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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