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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is often argued by some people that learning a foreign
language
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 is the way to go to study abroad and get higher education, and get an occupation
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 their field in a foreign
country
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.
On the other hand
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, some consider it's not mandatory to learn another
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.
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 my consideration, learning other languages is beneficial for us because it will help us expand our career in other countries, and it's a way to converse with others easily and efficiently It is important to note that learning other
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 help you in your future life. It will be useful to chat with other people with full confidence. By learning other languages, we are able to learn about the culture, tradition, and norms of other countries.
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, it
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 helps in our professional life. If we have a chance to move from our
country
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 to another other, we can present ourselves more effectively to others. To illustrate that when Cristiano Ronaldo moved from Portugal to Manchester, he first learn English to converse with the interviewer and his fans
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, people who think that learning other
language
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 is just a wastage of time are not able to, in fact, introduce themself as they do not know how to speak. They just lost their confidence and have not achieved their goal in life. To pen down all the points mentioned above, I would conclude that learning another
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 is important to gain respect in your field in another
country
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, and to express oneself in a foreign
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structure
Make your point clear in each paragraph. The essay should show both sides and your own view.
structure
Plan before you write. Use an intro, two body paragraphs, and a short ending.
evidence
Give a real example and link it to the point.
grammar
Fix grammar and word form. Some phrases are not correct.
vocabulary
Use simple words. Short sentences help keep ideas clear.
idea
The idea to discuss both sides is clear.
opinion
Your own view is stated.
example
Example of Ronaldo is used to show language learning helps.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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