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In the modern society, many people think that primary schools should teach science and technology rather than history and geography, which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some people opine that traditional
subjects
such
 as
history
 and
geography
 should not be taught in primary schools as they are boring and just add to the burden on primary
school
 students. They believe that
science
 and
technology
 should be there in primary schools. I agree that arts
subjects
 should be axed from the primary
school
 curricula. A number of arguments surround my opinion. The main reason to remove
history
 and
geography
 from primary
school
 is to lessen some burden off the
children
. It is seen that the weight of the primary
school
 student’s bag is heavier than the weight of the student himself.
However
, it does not mean that
history
 and
geography
 are less important. These
subjects
 are as important as
science
 and
technology
. These
subjects
 must be incorporated into the middle and high
school
 curriculum.
Secondly
, if teachers have to teach fewer
subjects
, they can add more physical activities for
children
 of the primary classes. The burden of too many
subjects
 will leave no time for sports. If the child is physically unhealthy he cannot bloom properly. It stifles his development. The objectives at
this
 stage are to nurture the curiosity of the child about the world and not to overburden him.
Finally
,
science
 and
technology
 are more interesting than
history
 and
geography
. So, in the early years
children
 will develop an interest in studying which will continue into later years. It is understandable that competition is cut-throat, but if a 'world class' high-quality curriculum has to be established, it is essential to prescribe less so that teachers can teach better and
children
 can learn better. To conclude, I reiterate my views that
science
 and
technology
 must be started in primary schools but the arts
subjects
 can be started after primary
school
 years
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