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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live, such as mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, due to the drastically increased number of population and environmental issues, it is becoming hard to live on the
earth
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. Many
people
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 say that the scientist should spend more time and wealth on researching the possibility of
life
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 on other planets
such
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 as Mars or the moon. In my opinion,
this
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 is not exactly a solution. I will support my stand with valid arguments in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, the
earth
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 is the best place for humans and animals to live
life
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 because it contains the proper atmosphere and it
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 has an adequate number of
resources
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 which fulfilling human’s routine needs.
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,
life
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 on the
earth
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 is getting difficult owing to some critical reasons like the destruction of the forest, industrial waste
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dispose
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 in water, air pollutions, lack of natural
resources
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 like minerals, fuels, gasoline will make it difficult for
people
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 to live.
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, all these problems can be resolved, if the
government
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 should spend capital in solving
this
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 issue by awarding
people
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 or developing eco-friendly systems for our daily needs which will make easier human
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 on the
earth
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instead
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 of searching for new planets.
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, the spread of coronavirus on the
earth
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 leads to thousand of death worldwide, all countries should spend money on finding vaccination and save
people
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’s lives.
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, our
government
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 have already spent lots of fund on spacecraft and space mission on researching of the new planet like mars, but,
still
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 our scientists are not finding any clauses where
people
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 can survive on the Mars or moon.
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,
earth
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 has an appropriate range of gases and
resources
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 but it needs to balanced and reformed, whereas, to find all these natural and minerals on mars will demand more wealth in future.
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, the
government
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 should allocate a budget for maintaining and controlling our climate by introducing strict laws and regulation for those who destruct our ecosystems. To sum up, there is no doubt that in future,
life
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 will be extremely difficult on the
earth
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 but we can save our planet if individuals and
government
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 should take proper action to save climate conditions and natural
resources
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.
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