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Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and TV is passive and does not require a person to use their imaginations. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Reading
books
 enhances a
person
's idea of imagination
however
,
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while watching
television
 and movies does not do the same . I strongly believe that visual
medias
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media
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 and films make a
person
 passive whereas , reading
books
 keeps him active.
This
 essay will discuss my
view point
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 with relevant examples.
To begin
 with, it is a true fact that
books
 always bring
its
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 readers to an imaginary world with
its
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their
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 letters.
For example
, when one reads
he
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creats
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creates
 his own ideas with the aid of the matters in the book to understand the fact .
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Therefore
 , reading not only improves one's reading skills
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but
also
 improves his imaginary skills too.
Moreover
, by creating
own
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 ideas, it will store in the mind of the reader for
long
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.
Thus
 , I strongly argue that reading
books
 keeps a
person
's mind active.
On the other hand
, the effect of visual
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medias
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media
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 like
television
 and movies
results
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 a
person
become
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becomes
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 passive. For instances, there is no doubt that
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television
 programmes are full of colours and characters
hence
,
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audience
audiences
audiance
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the audiance
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 do not need to imagine
about
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the characters and story.
Furthermore
, people become inactive and their participation in understanding the depth is minimal.They do not want to use their brain to get the meaning of the programme because all are available readily.
Thus
 , watching
televison
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television
 and films leads a
person
 passive. To conclude,
although
 reading
books
 and
waching
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watching
television
 and films are
matter
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 of entertainment for
the
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people
,
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 while reading
books
 a
person
 has to be more active and conscious whereas
television
 and movies make them more relaxed.
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