Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working not to get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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get fully occupied by their
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during the week and take complete rest during weekends that they do not have
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to exercise, which may
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affect their body and cause health problems in the long run.
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work
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from 9-5
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and now due to the pandemic,
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work
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from
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, it is proven that
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working from
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do not have fixed hours and
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, unknowingly
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for more than 10 hours a day.
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gives them little
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to focus on household activity, let alone doing any exercise. If
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work
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out or go to the
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after
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, it gives them less
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to prepare dinner or take care of their kids. These activities
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need
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and energy to focus on.
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,
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society is turning more lethargic, where things can be done at a click of a button, so
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rather spend
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at
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than doing any physical activity.
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,
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can change. If an individual has developed proper
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management skills,
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can get done effectively. Some companies can encourage their employees to use the in-house
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available at their offices. Some workplaces
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have table games like table tennis or air hockey so that their employees can move a muscle and play with their colleagues. At
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,
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can invest in small
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equipments
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equipment
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like a dumbell or rubber elastic band, so that they can
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out at
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,
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of going to the
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. Another excellent idea would be walking to places
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of taking a car. In some countries, public parks are equipped with
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gym-like
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gym
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the gym
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like
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equipment
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so that
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free of charge. In conclusion,
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need the motivation to do these activities; meanwhile, efforts are being made to encourage
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going
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to make
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to do some
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physical
activity which will improve their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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