Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working not to get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Job-oriented
people
get fully occupied by their
work
during the week and take complete rest during weekends that they do not have
time
to exercise, which may
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affect their body and cause health problems in the long run.
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People
work
from 9-5
everyday
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and now due to the pandemic,
people
work
from
home
.
As a result
, it is proven that
people
working from
home
do not have fixed hours and
hence
, unknowingly
work
for more than 10 hours a day.
This
gives them little
time
to focus on household activity, let alone doing any exercise. If
people
work
out or go to the
gym
after
work
, it gives them less
time
to prepare dinner or take care of their kids. These activities
also
need
time
and energy to focus on.
Moreover
,
the
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society is turning more lethargic, where things can be done at a click of a button, so
people
rather spend
time
at
home
than doing any physical activity.
However
,
this
can change. If an individual has developed proper
time
management skills,
these task
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can get done effectively. Some companies can encourage their employees to use the in-house
gym
available at their offices. Some workplaces
also
have table games like table tennis or air hockey so that their employees can move a muscle and play with their colleagues. At
home
,
people
can invest in small
gym
equipments
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equipment
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like a dumbell or rubber elastic band, so that they can
work
out at
home
,
instead
of going to the
gym
. Another excellent idea would be walking to places
instead
of taking a car. In some countries, public parks are equipped with
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gym-like
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gym
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the gym
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like
equipments
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equipment
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so that
people
can use
it
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them
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free of charge. In conclusion,
people
need the motivation to do these activities; meanwhile, efforts are being made to encourage
work
going
people
to make
time
to do some
physicall
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physical
activity which will improve their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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