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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we do not need, others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #advertisements #products #lives
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It is suggested by some that,
advertisements
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 implores
people
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 to purchase
products
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 that they do not need, while others think that commercials inform us about new merchandise that may improve our lives. In my opinion, I believe that
advertisements
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 are necessary because they can offer
variety
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 of
products
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 that can improve our daily lives . On one hand, commercials have suddenly become increasingly popular. Some
people
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 think that these infomercials persuade them into buying
products
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 they do not need. These days a lot of companies invest heavily in
advertisements
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 as a strategy to get consumers to purchase goods from the comfort of their homes using various methods like; secure credit card payment options, applications dedicated
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 online shopping etc.These
advertisements
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 have been set up in
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 a way that, it is persuasive to the public,
therefore
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people
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 indulge in buying
products
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 that they really have no need for, some can even go as far as exhausting the funds they do not have to satisfy their urges.
On the other hand
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,
advertisements
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 made life seemingly easier for
people
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 that do not have time to visit the shopping centres, they can do their necessary shopping from the comfort of their homes. These days, infomercials are quite interesting and informative and
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 with some incentives attached to the
products
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.
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, some companies give trial periods for testing
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some
products
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.
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people
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 can make payment for a product of their choice, try it out for a limited time
then
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 return if they become disinterested with the product plus full money back.
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, some offer massive discounts, sales , free delivery etc. In my opinion,
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advertisements
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 can be tempting, a person can easily be implored to purchase unwanted merchandises, it is
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 important to state that, it is very beneficial and easy especially for busy
people
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 who do not have time to shop at mall or shopping centres. In conclusion,
advertisements
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 have changed the way of communication between producers and their consumers because
,
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people
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 can now make their choice of goods from the comfort of their home while
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 being updated to improvements and variants of the
products
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 they are interested in. If the approach of restraint is applied by consumers they can avoid buying merchandise they do not need .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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