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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. What do you think is the case? Is this good or a bad thing?

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In recent times, many
people
 have become fashion-forward In their appearances. In my opinion,I agree with
this
 statement because I think
people
 are beginning to pay more attention to their clothing which I think can be a positive or negative thing. It can
also
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be considered by many, to be a reflection of their emotions and the expression of their creativity. Recently, many
people
 have become fashionable with regards to the way they
dress
. Fashion has always been in-style but these
days
,
people
 are paying more attention to their
clothings
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 because of numerous
reasons
 like; the attraction to bright colours, they feel they are addressed differently by
people
 when they seemingly
dress
 nicer, they are influenced by what they see on social media etc.
For example
,
people
 in the past
,
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 judged you based on your character and what you had to offer intellectually but these
days
, individuals have become rather fickle in how they perceive
people
hence
, the need to
dress
 up a certain way to make a good impression. Ultimately being fashionable has very become important to most
people
.
Furthermore
, being fashionable should not problematic but the
reasons
 behind it have to be addressed. These
days
,
people
dress
 fashionably for silly
reasons
 and
therefore
, it can affect the way other
people
 think because
people
 can easily get influenced by other
people
. It is
also
 important to add that some of
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 fashion-forward apparels are quite expensive and go out of style quickly. In comparison, fashion has inspired many
people
 and has become a positive outlet for expression and ultimately making
people
 feel good about themselves and their bodies . In conclusion,
people
 are very interested in fashion these
days
 and
therefore
, they are constantly pushing the envelope in terms of creativity
eventhough
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even though
, a negative connotation has become attached to
this
 as it forces
people
 to
over spend
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 and acquire these
clothings
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 for the wrong
reasons
. In my opinion, I think
people
 should be able to
dress
 how they want to and not necessarily have to be fashionable so far, they are comfortable and
also
, other
people
 should refrain from making remarks about
people
's clothing that can trigger
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feelings of self-doubt.
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