Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable, others, however, think it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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People

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always argue about watching

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; some say it is advisable

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because it makes us happy and

feel

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good. While some others are against

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argument, as they feel it wastes our precious

time

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unnecessarily.

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beleive

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believe

both arguments have some valid

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points

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I do not

completly

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agree or disagree with both statements. Watching

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usefull

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in many ways for humans. From the invention of

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it has

been become

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a hobby for millions of

people

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world wide

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. From childhood to

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, all most all watch

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everyday

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. It helps them to relax enjoy and learn.

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, in many

families

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it became a routine to watch

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as a family together in the evening. It is their family

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to share the common

intersest

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interest

. It helps them to learn new things and discuss their thoughts. By watching

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regularly; news and programmes many

people

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learn about current world affairs, politics and other interesting happenings around them. Many youngsters find

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way to relieve their

acdemic

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academic

and work stress by watching

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only when their alone and away from home.

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hand

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there are some other disadvantages

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there

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. Addiction to

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programes

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programmes

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mainly movies and talk

shows

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leading to

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mismanagment

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mismanagement

. Some

people

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waste their productive and precious

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infront

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in front

of screens for nothing.

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, It leads to a sedentary

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and

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eventually

makes them lazy and less active. Wasting too much

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time

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time

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infront

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in front

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the TV

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make

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people

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sick and obese. Reason survey found that

people

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who are watching

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than 4hours per day found to be more obese and less productive than their counterpart of

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age and sex. So it is obvious that

people

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should not addict to

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and limiting

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screen

time

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is essential. In conclusion,

watchingTV

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watching tv

watching

watching ITV

is greatly

benificial

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beneficial

if it is limited to a

time

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frame and

usefull

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useful

programs, only by

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people

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can find joy and happiness.

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, it leads to screen addiction and

ultimtely

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ultimately

ended up severe health consequences and

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time wasting

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

343 words

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diverse tastes
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social interaction
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leisure time
pursuing hobbies
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Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable, others, however, think it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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easily. In addition, the city is central to the state, trade, education and many sectors of the human being so society tends to find new experiences and broaden their horizon in the metropolitan which supports people’s capability at work.

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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