7. In cities, space for housing should be created by knocking down historic buildings. What is your opinion?

Some people consider that historical
buildings
should be demolished to build new residential properties. I strongly disagree with
this
because these are
crucial
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part of national
heritage
and help to attract
tourists
.
Firstly
, old
buildings
are part of national
heritage
and have importance for the country in which it is situated. These are the symbol of national culture. Some old
buildings
have unique design and architecture of these are worldwide famous. If these traditional and unique
buildings
are demolished,
such
identity is lost.
For instance
,
Jantra
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Mantra of India is an example of unique architecture. These
buildings
should not be knocked down to build new houses because preserving the national and cultural
heritage
is the
responsibilty
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responsibility
responsibly
of the nation.
Secondly
, historical
buildings
are
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center
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of attraction for
tourists
. They always have
keen
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interest in the conventional style of
buildings
.
Nations
which has more historical
buildings
can earn good revenue by charging entry tickets from visitors.
This
will eventually help these
nations
to grow.
For instance
, most of
authorities
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of the palaces in Jaipur in India charge a small amount to every
spectators
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;
however
,
these charge
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a double ticket price from foreigners. The attraction for these
buildings
is beneficial for
nations
as
these help
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to earn income. In conclusion, historical
buildings
are an indispensable part of cultural
heritage
and attraction for
tourists
. I believe these should not be demolished to build new houses as the importance for the nation will be lost and
tourists
will not visit which will be a loss for
nations
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contentious
  • pragmatic
  • repurposing
  • feasible
  • tangible
  • adaptive reuse
  • cultural heritage
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable
  • stakeholder engagement
  • urban development
  • preserving
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