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The family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree.

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IN MODERN TIMES , THE ISSUE OF CHILDREN IMPROVING HAS BECOME HIGHLY CONTROVERSIAL. THERE ARE THOSE WHO SAY THAT FAMILY HAS A LARGE EFFECT ON GROWTH OF CHILDREN ,
HOWEVER
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 OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IMPACT FROM OUTSIDE HAVE MORE EFFECT IN THEIR LIFE. IN
THIS
 ESSAY, I WILL EXAMINE BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT AND PROVIDE MY OVERALL OPINION. GENERALLY SPEAKING, THERE IS A WIDE RANGE OF REASONS WHY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT PARENTS AFFECT ON LIVE OF THE THEIR BRATS. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASON WHY PEOPLE ARE IN FAVOUR OF
THIS
 IDEA IS BECAUSE MOTHER AND FATHER ARE TO TEACH HOW WE CAN BE APLOMB HUMAN BEING
NEXT
 YEARS. A GOOD ILLUSTRATION OF
THIS
 THAT A PUPIL HAVING APLOMB SHOULD BE SUCCESSFUL IN THE SCHOOL LİFE, FROM PRİMARY SCHOOL TO UNIVERSITY.
AS A RESULT
, HE/SHE SHOULD BE TALENTED STUDENT IN THE SCHOOL.
SECONDLY
, ALL OF THE KINDS SHOULD LEARN DECENCY FROM PARENTS
INSTEAD
 OF OTHERS CROWD
SUCH
 AS FRIEND, TEACHER OR ETC. DESPİTE THESE ARGUMENTS, THERE IS
ALSO
 A CASE FOR THE IDEA THAT TEACHER SHOULD BE AFFECT DEVELOPMENT OF PUPIL , AS MORE AND MORE THAN THEIR FAMILY. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASON WHY PEOPLE THINK THAT
THIS
 IDEA IS BECAUSE ALL PARENTS GO TO WORK ,
THEN
 AS TRIED, THEY COME TO HOME.
MOREOVER
, THEY WANT TO FIND A GOOD TUTOR FOR DEVELOPING THE HIM/HER BRAT.
AS A RESULT
 , THEY SHOULD NOT BE EFFECTİVE ON THEIR BEHAVIOR. IF WE DO NOT LOOK AFTER ON OUR CHILDREN, THEY SHOULD BE BAD HUMAN BEINGS
NEXT
 YEARS BY MEANS OF FRIEND,
ALTHOUGH
 THEY HAVE A AMAZING TUTOR. IN CONCLUSION,
THIS
 IS A TOPIC WHICH IS EVERY RELEVANT TO MODERN SOCIETY. MY PERSONAL VIEW IS THAT WE ARE INTERESTED IN KID ,
ALSO
 HAVE A SUCCESSFUL TEACHER. IF WE MAKE THEM, OUR COUNTRY HAVE
FURTHER
 STRONG PERSONS.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nurturing environment
  • emotional and psychological development
  • foundational stone
  • external influences
  • diverse perspectives
  • digital media
  • peer pressure
  • social circles
  • intellectual development
  • structured knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural and societal norms
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