The family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree.

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IN MODERN TIMES , THE ISSUE OF CHILDREN IMPROVING HAS BECOME HIGHLY CONTROVERSIAL. THERE ARE THOSE WHO SAY THAT FAMILY HAS A LARGE EFFECT ON GROWTH OF CHILDREN ,
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OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IMPACT FROM OUTSIDE HAVE MORE EFFECT IN THEIR LIFE. IN
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ESSAY, I WILL EXAMINE BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT AND PROVIDE MY OVERALL OPINION. GENERALLY SPEAKING, THERE IS A WIDE RANGE OF REASONS WHY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT PARENTS AFFECT ON LIVE OF THE THEIR BRATS. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASON WHY PEOPLE ARE IN FAVOUR OF
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IDEA IS BECAUSE MOTHER AND FATHER ARE TO TEACH HOW WE CAN BE APLOMB HUMAN BEING
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YEARS. A GOOD ILLUSTRATION OF
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THAT A PUPIL HAVING APLOMB SHOULD BE SUCCESSFUL IN THE SCHOOL LİFE, FROM PRİMARY SCHOOL TO UNIVERSITY.
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, HE/SHE SHOULD BE TALENTED STUDENT IN THE SCHOOL.
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, ALL OF THE KINDS SHOULD LEARN DECENCY FROM PARENTS
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OF OTHERS CROWD
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AS FRIEND, TEACHER OR ETC. DESPİTE THESE ARGUMENTS, THERE IS
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A CASE FOR THE IDEA THAT TEACHER SHOULD BE AFFECT DEVELOPMENT OF PUPIL , AS MORE AND MORE THAN THEIR FAMILY. PERHAPS THE MAIN REASON WHY PEOPLE THINK THAT
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IDEA IS BECAUSE ALL PARENTS GO TO WORK ,
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AS TRIED, THEY COME TO HOME.
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, THEY WANT TO FIND A GOOD TUTOR FOR DEVELOPING THE HIM/HER BRAT.
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, THEY SHOULD NOT BE EFFECTİVE ON THEIR BEHAVIOR. IF WE DO NOT LOOK AFTER ON OUR CHILDREN, THEY SHOULD BE BAD HUMAN BEINGS
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YEARS BY MEANS OF FRIEND,
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THEY HAVE A AMAZING TUTOR. IN CONCLUSION,
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IS A TOPIC WHICH IS EVERY RELEVANT TO MODERN SOCIETY. MY PERSONAL VIEW IS THAT WE ARE INTERESTED IN KID ,
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HAVE A SUCCESSFUL TEACHER. IF WE MAKE THEM, OUR COUNTRY HAVE
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STRONG PERSONS.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nurturing environment
  • emotional and psychological development
  • foundational stone
  • external influences
  • diverse perspectives
  • digital media
  • peer pressure
  • social circles
  • intellectual development
  • structured knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural and societal norms
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