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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give an nion.

In recent years, the question of whether
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exploration
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 is a valuable investment or a waste of resources has sparked considerable debate.
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 some argue that the vast sums spent on exploring the universe could be better directed toward solving urgent problems on Earth, others believe that continuing to investigate outer
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 is crucial for the advancement and survival of humanity. In my opinion, despite its high cost,
space
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exploration
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 is indispensable. On the one hand, critics of
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 research highlight the enormous financial burden it places on governments. Billions of dollars are spent on rockets, satellites, and
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 stations,
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 poverty, climate change, and healthcare crises remain unresolved on our planet.
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, some argue that the money used to launch a single spacecraft could
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 provide clean drinking water or education to millions of people in developing countries. From
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 perspective,
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exploration
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 seems like a luxury when humanity faces so many pressing challenges at home.
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, supporters contend that exploring the universe offers long-term benefits that far outweigh the costs.
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, many modern technologies,
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 as GPS navigation, weather forecasting, and satellite communications, are direct results of
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 programs and now play an essential role in daily life.
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, studying other planets may provide solutions to global issues,
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 as alternative energy sources or habitable environments if Earth becomes uninhabitable
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 overpopulation or environmental destruction. In
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 sense,
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 research not only advances scientific knowledge but
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 ensures the survival of future generations. In conclusion,
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 critics argue that the resources devoted to
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exploration
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 could be redirected to urgent terrestrial needs, I believe that its potential benefits for science, technology, and human survival make it a worthwhile and essential investment. Governments should,
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, strive to balance spending between
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 projects and addressing immediate problems on Earth.

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task response
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a clear view in one sentence.
coherence cohesion
Keep a set of connecting words to show the idea flow and make the text link well.
examples
Give more real, exact examples to back up each point when you can.
structure
Clear view in the opening and closing paragraphs.
content
Good balance of sides with a stated opinion.
language
Use of examples like GPS and weather shows real link to life.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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