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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 day and age,
people
 are focusing on meeting their material needs.
This
 has led manufacturing companies to produce more consumer goods to meet their demand. The drawbacks of
this
 trend outweigh the benefits which
this
 essay is going to elaborate
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.
First
 and foremost, in the modern
era
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 individuals are acquiring a lot of possessions as a way of showing their status.
For example
, everyone
want
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wants
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 to decorate their house with
latest
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 furniture and have different gadgets.
This
 has resulted in very beautiful homes and
also
 it has made
people
to
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work very hard so as to meet their goals.
Therefore
 it is positive and does not benefit individuals alone but nations.
However
,
such
 has resulted in low production of capital goods as every company try to work on things that are
on
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 high demand.
For instance
, manufacturing industries
by pass
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 the need for machinery and
and
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therefore
 resulting in them becoming very expensive .
Furthermore
 ,as everyone is basing on producing immediate products a lot of counterfeit are seen in the market.
People
 will buy them without realising that and
this
 will be a loss .
Consequently
, high demand for certain commodities limits
making
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 of other important things ,in
this
case
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 machinery,
also
 resulting in a number of dishonest on the market. To conclude,
although
 consumer goods have become so essential I believe the cons outweigh the pros.
People
has
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 put a lot of pressure on producers as they are working to their demands .
Such
 has
rcaused
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caused
 in an imbalance in production industries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass production
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental degradation
  • natural resources
  • overconsumption
  • waste management
  • landfill
  • social inequality
  • materialism
  • financial strain
  • mental well-being
  • quality of life
  • job creation
  • productivity
  • pollution
  • deforestation
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