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Write about the following topic. It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a saying, "the world is getting smaller", which portrays the rapid
development
 of
technology
 to travel and communicate between every corner of the globe. Nowadays,
the
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transportation
technology
 has allowed
people
 to discover even the most remote
areas
 of
this
 planet. Some
people
 may regard that as beneficial, while others see the negative aspects as well.
This
 essay presents the advantages and drawbacks of
this
technology
development
. One of the positive aspects of
such
development
 is that scientists can study the environments of remote natural
areas
. Take an example the researchers which study the ice cover in parts of Antarctica. By analyzing the ice layers,
the
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scientists can develop models to approximate the timeline of the Earth's climate and environment up to hundreds of million years ago.
Another
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 examples include ecologists studying the ecosystem in remote environments and archaeologists researching the remains of civilization. Another
advantageof
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advantage of
such
technology
 is that it can prevent overcrowded populations. By exploring new
areas
,
people
 can build new civilizations. Examples of
this
 can be observed in many developing countries with rapidly increasing populations, where the government is building new cities and towns to spread out the population.
Such
development
also
 has some disadvantages,
however
. Discovering remote
areas
 can,
for instance
, disrupt the native ecosystems of the environment. One example is building a new civilization in a remote area, which often requires the cutting of trees or even forests which are the natural habitats of species present in that area. Another example of the negative effect of
such
technology
development
 involves uncontacted tribes. "Regular"
people
 may bring diseases formerly unknown to the remote tribes which can lead to the decline of their population. In short, it can be said that the travel
technology
 allowing
people
 to explore remote environments has its own benefits
such
 as in science and building new civilizations, but one should
also
 consider the negative effects
such
 as the environmental impacts.
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