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Some people believe that it is better for children learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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IN MODERN TIMES, THE ISSUE OF LEARNING A FOREIGN
LANGUAGE
 HAS BECOME HIGHLY CONTROVERSIAL. THERE ARE THOSE WHO SAY THAT PUPIL SHOULD EASILY LEARN A NEW
LANGUAGE
 AT PRİMARY
SCHOOL
,
HOWEVER
 OTHERS BELİEVE THAT
STUDENT
 CAN LEARN IT BETTER AT SECONDARY
SCHOOL
. IN
THIS
 ESSAY I WILL EXAMINE THE BENEFITS AND DOWNSIDES OF THOS ARGUMENT AND PROVIDE MY OVERALL OPINION. FROM AN OVERALL PERSPECTIVE, THERE IS A NUMBER OF ADVANTAGE OF LEARNING IT AT THE PRİMARY
SCHOOL
 FOR CHILDREN. PERHAPS THE MAIN ADVANTAGES OF
THIS
 TOPIC IS THAT
STUDENT
 SHOULD UNDERSTAND HOW THEY LEARN A NEW
LANGUAGE
 AT
THE
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PRIMARY
SCHOOL
 RATHER THAN SECONDARY
SCHOOL
.
THIS
 IS BECAUSE BRAIN OF PUPILS IS QUITE YOUNG AND NON-STRESSFUL.
AS A RESULT
, THEY CAN LEARN EFFECTIVELY A NEW
LANGUAGE
 RATHER THAN OTHER HUMAN BEINGS THROUGHOUT WORLD. DESPITE THESE
ARGUMENTS
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 THERE IS
ALSO
 VARIOUS DISADVANTAGE OF STUDYING A NEW
LANGUAGE
. A
FURTHER
 AGANIST IT IS THAT A PUPIL AT SECONDARY
SCHOOL
 SHOULD BE STUDIED PERMANENTLY RATHER THAN A
STUDENT
 AT THE PRİMARY
SCHOOL
.
THIS
 IS BECAUSE A PERSON AT THE SECONDARY
SCHOOL
,
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BECAUSE OF HIM-HER AGE, KNOW MORE AND MORE WORD THAN CHILD AT THE PRİMARY
SCHOOL
.
FURTHERMORE
, THEY , WHO ARE WANTING A GOOD FUTURE, ESPECIALLY AT THE TURKEY, SHOULD WANT TO LEARN IN PERMANENT WAYS TO FIND A GOOD JOB AT
THE
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THEIR CAREER. IN CONCLUSION, IT MUST BE SAID THAT LEARNING A NEW
LANGUAGE
 AT PRIMARY OR SECONDARY
SCHOOL
 HAS CLEAR ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES. MY PERSONEL VIEW IS THAT ,IF A
STUDENT
 HAVE TO LEARN A NEW
LANGUAGE
 , THEY SHOULD BEGIN AT EARLY AGES
INSTEAD
 OF
SCHOOL
.
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