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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely result in society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 permitting kids to make their own choices on food, clothes and entertainment make them efficient to take a wise decision on their life, often it makes them selfish. I
also
 agree with those people who think child to make personal
opinions
 about things that have negative impacts on them. Generally, in
this
 modern world, many
parents
 believe that happiness means getting
freedom
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 to develop
own
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their own
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 perspective on everyday matters, especially, dies, clothes and anything which provides entertain.
Thus
, people allow their kids to share their like or dislike about daily necessities.
Similarly
, they think the
children
whose
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who
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 have
right
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the right
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 to make their personal
opinions
 would be more
intellectual
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 to make wise
thinks
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think
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on
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about
in
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 their future life.
For instance
, Wellspring whose
parents
 permit them
choosing
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to choose
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 their
favorite
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favourite
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 items, those
are feel
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feel
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 confident and may develop their
decision making
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decision-making
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 ability.
A part
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from
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of
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 these positive effects on
children
 making
own
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their own
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 perspective on selecting everyday goods, it has some adverse effects on
child’s
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a child’s
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behavior
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behaviour
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 and social activities. Freedom for making choices, sometimes cause
of
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by
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selfishness
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the selfishness
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 of
children
.
For example
, young could not think about others
opinions
,
therefore
, they always try to force
other
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others
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 to establish their personal thinking lead to
misbehave
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 with other individuals in
the
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apply
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society. For these reasons, some
parents
 do not allow their wellsprings to make their own choices. So, I think
parents
 should be aware
on
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of
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 their child’s personal
opinions
. In conclusion, allowing
children
 to build their own wishes is important to make wise decisions in their
further
 life, but may
also
 make them
self-center
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self-centre
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, could not feel others feelings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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