Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree?

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recent years,
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has become a phenomenon among
people
in the world.
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diet provides many nutrients for a healthy lifestyle. I believe
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everyone should follow
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trend. On the one hand, there are many benefits
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being vegetarian.
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, there are many nutrients in
vegetables
to help keep
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fit. It helps reduce
Cholesterol
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in the
body
.
Vegetables
and fruits contain Fiber, vitamins and low fatty acid.
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to limit the absorption of fat more than eating meat,
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to lose weight often choose diets high in green
vegetables
.
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,
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without meat helps you prevent many diseases
such
as sick
about
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the cardiovascular system, cancer or
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.
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highly beneficial for
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aging
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compartment and the immune system.
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, there are many
people
who need meat with their meals. Actually, if
people
only eat
vegetables
, children and
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will not
heve
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nutrion
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nutrition

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there are many nutrients found only in meats
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fishes.
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.
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that, not only eating
vegetables
helps
people
have
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body
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to lose weight can eat chicken breast combined with play sports. To sum up, while I agree that becoming vegetarian can helps
people
have
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feeling of well-being. But it not good for everyone.
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