Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is suggested that
music
and sports
are not relevant subjects
, therefore
schools should educate children on some academic courses that will be advantageous in their future careers. I disagree with this
viewpoint as I believe that arts and sports
creates an avenue for self expression
and may Add a hyphen
self-expression
also
create better opportunities for the children in the future.
Firstly
, arts and sporting activities are a major component of a
active child's life. Change the article
an
These
subject creates a safe space of Change the determiner
This
self expression
and development. Add a hyphen
self-expression
For instance
, as a former child myself, I can boldly say that music
and athletics saved me. The characteristics that I exhibit today, happened as a result
of training on the field with my classmates, getting in teenage squabbles and finding solutions in
that moment because during competitions we had to band together. Change the preposition
at
Music
also
give
us the freedom to express our emotions Change the verb form
gives
deal
with personal issues through the various lessons about musicals and how they came about. Add the particle
to deal
Therefore
, music
is essential because it is truly the
medicine for the soul.
Remove the article
apply
Secondly
, music
and sports
are subjects
that require either talent, skill or hardwork
. The option of these Correct your spelling
hard work
subjects
are
needed in schools becauseChange the verb form
is
,
some students have various strengths and weaknesses . A clear example would be, basketball stars. Remove the comma
apply
Majority
of them have stated thatCorrect article usage
The majority
,
they struggled academically Remove the comma
apply
however
, they Add the comma(s)
,however
where
able to discover their talent Replace the word
were
such
as athleticism before they streamlined it to basketball which has not only made them famous and influential people but also
wealthy. Therefore
, if the option of sports
were made unavailable at their schools, it would have been very difficult for them to achieve any goals set for themselves to becoming upright and outstanding members of society.
In conclusion, eventhough
, academic Correct your spelling
even though
subjects
are important, music
and sports
are relevant as well because,
they give an average or struggling student a chance at a bright future. Remove the comma
apply
Therefore
, scrapping it from the school curriculum would do not good to
either the kids or society.Change preposition
for
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