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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely argued that countries should be self-sufficient in
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 production and minimize the number of imported
food
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products
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. I completely disagree with the statement and the following paragraphs will shed light on the reasons for my disagreement.
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, it is impossible for a
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 to survive with its own
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 as
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 limits the array of
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 available for public consumption.Certain exotic vegetables or fruits thrive well only in a particular climatic condition and not every
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 is capable of producing all the consumables.
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, blueberries are commonly found everywhere as it requires a cooler climate. So, it grows well in Canada and U.S.A
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, it won't flourish in a tropical
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 like Thailand. It is unrealistic to expect a
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 to grow all of it's produce.
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, importing foods are extremely beneficial to a nation's economy. People nowadays are open to adopting a healthier lifestyle and many of them opt for high-grade
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 supplements from foreign countries. As the demand for
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 superfoods as spirulina, kale is increasing numerous e-commerce websites have started importing and selling these
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, thereby contributing revenue to the economy.
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, if people need to get their hands on high-quality
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 it can only happen if they are imported. To conclude, it is impractical for a nation to meet all the
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 requirements of its entire population if it limits the choices to only homegrown produce.
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, people require a variety and high-end
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 which may not be available in their native
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. In my opinion, countries should not limit themselves and import different
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.
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