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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest an interesting part of the city to live in * describe the public transport in your city say how your friend can meet new people there

The two plans
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 changes to
a
Correct article usage
the
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 ground
floor
Use synonyms
 of
museum
Correct article usage
the museum
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 from 1990 to 2010. The most significant alteration was the location of
statue
Correct article usage
the statue
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. In
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 it had been moved to the centre of
ground
Correct article usage
the ground
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floor
Use synonyms
 from the left side of
stairs
Correct article usage
the stairs
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.
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Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 there was
Linking Words
instead
Punctuation problem
, instead
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 of
Correct article usage
the Archeology
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Archeology
Change the spelling
Archaeology
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 gallery, a Children’s interactive zone and
Poster
Correct article usage
a Poster
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 display area on the right part of
Use synonyms
floor
Correct article usage
the floor
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. The natural history room was located on the left part of the building,
while
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 the archaeology gallery was on the right side.
Additionally
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,
there
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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was built a lift
Correct word order
a lift was built
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 between
Local
Correct article usage
the Local
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 history room and
Gift
Correct article usage
the Gift
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shop
Punctuation problem
shop,
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was enlarged and became
also
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 a Cafe.
Therefore
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, some of
walls
Correct article usage
the walls
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 from
Local
Correct article usage
the Local
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 history room to
Children’s
Correct article usage
the Children’s
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 interactive zone had been taken down.
However
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 Museum office did not change the location, Reception Counter moved closer to the expanded entrance.
Overall
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,
ground
Correct article usage
the ground
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floor
Use synonyms
 of
museum
Correct article usage
the museum
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 has undergone a number of major alterations
since
Change preposition
from
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 1990 to 2010.

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task response
Fix tense and grammar. Use past tense for changes and be exact about dates. Check spelling and word order.
coherence cohesion
Break the text into 2 or 3 short parts (paragraphs), each with one main idea. Use linking words to show how ideas go together.
coherence
The text uses linking words like Moreover and Additionally.
content
It gives many details on what changed in the plan.
tone
The tone is formal and fits a report.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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