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Writing Samples
Band 5

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest an interesting part of the city to live in * describe the public transport in your city say how your friend can meet new people there

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Dear Lilia, I'm so excited that you're moving to Chisinau for work! I'm sure you'll love it here.
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, I recommend living in neibourds
centru
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centres
 because it's a vibrant area with great restaurants, parks, and cultural attractions. It's
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 safe and has everything you need
with in
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within
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 walking distance.
Secondly
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, public transport here is quite efficient. We have
busses
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, trams, and a metro system that connect most
part
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parts
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 of the city.
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, You can join local clubs, attend language exchange meetups, or participate in community events.
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, there are many coworking spaces where you can connect with
professional
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professionals
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 from different fields.
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, if you need anything, I will show you with great love, just ask for my help Best regards, Vlada

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Task Achievement
Try to provide a more detailed description of the neighborhood yourself. Perhaps mention specific restaurants or parks to give a clearer picture.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to check for small spelling errors, such as 'neighbourds' which should be 'neighborhoods' and 'with in' which should be 'within'.
Tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
Content
Your suggestions for meeting new people are varied and practical, which adds value to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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